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  • #2
    Hmm. I should get my act together.

    Some items that were on Buffyworld are probably not going to be reprinted here, either because they were unfinished and I do not expect to complete them any time soon, or because I am not pleased with their quality.

    That said:

    Memorial in a Motel Room My first piece at BWF. It went largely unnoticed there, and I am not entirely happy with it, but it's received some nice comments here.

    Rest: a dream piece with a twist. It was the first piece I did at BWF to receive any recognition--a rep hit from Kirsi for the poetic imagery.

    Bringing Gifts An AU piece set in S6, that is well-known enough now that I may as well dispense with spoiler tags and admit that it includes Dawn and Tara as vampires. My first attempt at portraying a vamp!Tara.

    All in Her Mind A recent "retconDawn" ficlet set during "Nightmares".

    The Djinni Asked Me How I Wanted to Die
    Two Boats and a Helicopter--a pair of experimental fics in which Buffy is 90. Though loosely related, they are essentially independent; there may be a third installment eventually. I entered the second in the Written, but it lost to Tangent's.

    Blue Shift
    If you swore off Joss forever when Tara died...don't read this.
    There is always something worse.

    Dark Field
    A tale of the far, far future. We have seen the First Slayer. For every first...
    There must be a Last.

    Other Worlds Than These
    A Buffy/Dark Tower crossover fic. Nuff said.

    Slayage
    A set of DeadWar related drabbles.

    Bond
    Contains Willow, vamp!Tara, and BDSM. Falls into the "I can't believe I wrote this" category.
    Oh, and the subbie? Probably not who you're thinking.

    Beauty and Beasts
    A Buffyverse fairytale.

    Early Warning
    Anyone out there remember "The Monster Squad"? Buffy does.
    Too bad it doesn't look like she's gonna listen. Contains potential S8 spoilers.

    Hell Mouth
    Four drabbles about the long, long fight against the darkness.

    Some drabbles:
    Working with Chimps
    Something I Ate
    Anointed
    Hellfire
    Dabbler
    And a long listing...
    Drabbles

    And the DeadWar series, beginning with the award-winning Shadow Sun, which was originally a stand-alone and was my first victory in the Written. (I hope for many more. )
    Damn Nation
    What Puzzles the Will
    Out of Sight
    Out of Mind
    Mercykiller
    Glimmers of Dark
    Strangers on the Bus
    If Immortality Unveil
    Transits
    Schism 1.01: Compromised
    Constitution of Silence
    Haven 1.01: Kill All the Lawyers
    Schism 1.02: Tell Me All Your Thoughts on Gog
    Be Good, Sweet Maid
    Haven 1.02 In Depth
    Schism 1.03 Rough Edges
    Strange Aeons
    Haven 1.03 Disturb the Universe
    Schism 1.04 Generation of Vipers
    And Having Writ
    Haven 1.04 Facilis Descensus Averni
    Schism 1.05 Judgement Call
    Burden of Proof
    Haven 1.05 The Lion and the Ox
    Schism 1.06: Silverware
    Magic Markers
    Haven 1.06: Worker's Paradise
    Schism 1.07: Facade
    Quintessence of Dust
    Haven 1.07: Pay No Attention to That Man Behind the Monster
    Schism 1.08: Vicious Circle
    Red Right Arm
    Haven 1.08: Great and Terrible
    Schism 1.09: Outcast
    So Farewell Hope
    Haven 1.09: Bleeding Kansas
    Schism 1.10: A Desert Called Peace
    Refuge of Lies
    Haven 1.10: Grey
    Sonrise
    Thou Profoundest Hell
    Perpetual Angelus
    The Iron Way
    Zero Summer
    Hell's Heart
    Hate's Sake
    And Round Perdition's Flames
    Last Gleaming
    Epilogue: All the Live-Long Day
    Last edited by Mabus; 08-06-10, 08:42 AM.
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    • #3
      I'd just like to say a few words about the Deadwar series. This has to be one of the most original and well thought out concept in the fic section. I won't go into specific's for those that have never come across it but it is definitely something that everyone should read.
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      • #4
        Originally posted by tangent View Post
        I'd just like to say a few words about the Deadwar series. This has to be one of the most original and well thought out concept in the fic section. I won't go into specific's for those that have never come across it but it is definitely something that everyone should read.
        Thank you, Mark. When I set out to write DeadWar, I was reasonably sure I was heading into uncharted waters--or something like, at least. I have seen fics involving some of the ideas in DeadWar, but never put together in this combination. Of course, that could mean I'm not writing to a very large audience....
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        • #5
          Originally posted by Mabus View Post
          Thank you, Mark. When I set out to write DeadWar, I was reasonably sure I was heading into uncharted waters--or something like, at least. I have seen fics involving some of the ideas in DeadWar, but never put together in this combination. Of course, that could mean I'm not writing to a very large audience....
          With the combo of uncharted waters and the quality of DeadWar, it's worth checking you've made it clear the concept (although not joss's characters of course) belong to you. A sad fact that the better the idea, the more likely some little bugger will try and nick it ... it's a sign of good stuff, but not enough respeck!

          I think just saying something along the lines that the DeadWar concept is your dolly in the disclaimer is OK (and about all we can do) for web-based fanfic material. Jo protects "Monico" with the right words - you could check with her?
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          • #6
            Originally posted by ferdy-m View Post
            With the combo of uncharted waters and the quality of DeadWar, it's worth checking you've made it clear the concept (although not joss's characters of course) belong to you. A sad fact that the better the idea, the more likely some little bugger will try and nick it ... it's a sign of good stuff, but not enough respeck!

            I think just saying something along the lines that the DeadWar concept is your dolly in the disclaimer is OK (and about all we can do) for web-based fanfic material. Jo protects "Monico" with the right words - you could check with her?
            That's a very good idea, Ferdy. And I think there's a bit of quiet praise hidden in there somewhere--thanks!
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            • #7
              I finished reading what you have posted of DeadWar just a few seconds ago. I love the concept of it, it is well written, and the characters are in-character. I look forward to reading more!
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              • #8
                Originally posted by Sassy View Post
                I finished reading what you have posted of DeadWar just a few seconds ago. I love the concept of it, it is well written, and the characters are in-character. I look forward to reading more!
                Thanks muchly, Sassy. The next installment is in beta as we speak.
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                • #9
                  Just read "they like to watch her strut" - interesting to see Illyria from Harmony's point of view. Somehow, they're not all that different...both completely self centred and unaware of the needs of others. Liked the "am I walking incorrectly" line. And the strangled sound

                  Oh, and the reduction of Wes' complex anguished feelings for Fred/illlyria to "Wes was such a perv". Snerk!


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                  • #10
                    Originally posted by Wolfie Gilmore View Post
                    Just read "they like to watch her strut" - interesting to see Illyria from Harmony's point of view. Somehow, they're not all that different...both completely self centred and unaware of the needs of others. Liked the "am I walking incorrectly" line. And the strangled sound

                    Oh, and the reduction of Wes' complex anguished feelings for Fred/illlyria to "Wes was such a perv". Snerk!
                    I almost wonder if I shouldn't have done that one as a longer ficlet. I kept having to cut context out of what was happening.
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                    • #11
                      Originally posted by Mabus View Post
                      I almost wonder if I shouldn't have done that one as a longer ficlet. I kept having to cut context out of what was happening.
                      Why don't you expand it? I like drabbles as a discipline thing, but if what you want to say needs more words...treat yourself to more words.


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                      • #12
                        Originally posted by Wolfie Gilmore View Post
                        Why don't you expand it? I like drabbles as a discipline thing, but if what you want to say needs more words...treat yourself to more words.
                        I was in a hurry last night. Sometimes editing takes more time, but in this case the shorter fic was...um...shorter. Perhaps I should expand it to make clear what's going on...as I seem to have confused just about everyone. Even myself.
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                        • #13
                          Originally posted by Mabus View Post
                          I was in a hurry last night. Sometimes editing takes more time, but in this case the shorter fic was...um...shorter. Perhaps I should expand it to make clear what's going on...as I seem to have confused just about everyone. Even myself.
                          Heh. I probably just wasn't reading carefully enough. But as I said ..I liek the idea of Harmony reducing complex ideas about Wes's response to Illyria to "Wes = perv".


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                          • #14
                            I had an absolute blast reading the Dead War series as it sits. Your Buffy Vamp... Big fun! Very imaginative.

                            You actually caused me to walk away from the machine at least once for a cuppa with the raw, visceral aspect of her nature. It takes a lot to cause me to regroup.

                            In addition I absolutely loved the piece Memorial in a Motel Room. It's a very amusing, fast little read that caused me to chuckle at least once.

                            That's really the beauty of what you do though... The humorous elements are very chuckle worthy, they blend nicely with the violence. (sometimes in the violence) Both of these elements fall nicely into place in a well thought out, complex plot line.

                            Very well done!

                            My only complaint might be that your Willow might be just a little too Willow. She seems to be on edge about 95% of the time. Very insecure still in what she knows and does. I might move her forward one more tile. It just didn't feel quite right to me. Maybe it's just the expectation that's been placed on her showing through in your writing? She's not so much for the idea of being in the spotlight. I dunno...

                            Otherwise the character voices are very crisp not that hers isn't...it's just too...Willowy...

                            Valyssia

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                            • #15
                              Glad you're enjoying it. I'm having some trouble with Transits, but hopefully I should be able to move it along soon.

                              *nods* I hadn't heard that comment about my Willow before (everyone seems to pick one character who's a little off, so I try not to take it too seriously, or unseriously either), but it does make some sense. Will's in a really bad place at the moment, at least in DeadWar; one of her best friends is a mentally-unstable vampire and the other is being less than open-minded about just about everything. She's got the weight of the world on her shoulders and not a lot of help carrying it.

                              Now, if you mean in my other fic too...I honestly don't know. It's been a while since I've seen much Buffy, so maybe I'm overdoing it a bit.
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